Hi Derek,
I know how much effort goes into making a video, so I do not want to sound negative. I believe that it is very easy to concentrate on the visuals at the expense of the story. The points I would make:
1. Good selection of appropriate soundtrack
2. Some awesome shots with good choice of background
3. Lack of a story
4. Lack of consistency, particularly liveries.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing more from you.
HTH